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Whose story is it anyway?

As cop shows go,  Line of Duty (Tuesdays BBC2) strikes me as a cut above the average. No surprise when I realised the writer is Jed Mercurio, (remember the almost fly-on-wall style Bodies? – how could I forget!) Although in LoD there’s none of the jerky camera thing, the casting is really great, the characters are have a realistic complexity and just a couple of scenarios have generated more than enough plot for five episodes (fourth was last night). But why is it then, that each time I watch, I find it hard to remember what went before, and find myself paying close attention to that ‘previously’ sequence which usually has me shouting at the telly (I know what happened last time just get on with it!) Yes, the plot is getting increasingly complex, but I think what makes it harder to follow is that there is no obvious hero, or, conversely, there is more than one.

We began with the DCI Tony Gates being given an award as ‘Officer of the Year’. He’s a loyal family man, adored by his colleagues and absolutely oozes charisma. But someone thinks he has cooked the books to make his and the force’s record better than it is. On his tail is quiet hard-working DS Arnott from the anti-corruption squad. He has had a raw deal arising from a previous botched raid, he has that lean and angst-ridden look and is treated as a pariah because of the job he does.  Soon it emerges that golden boy Gates has plenty to hide. We’re on Arnott’s side in the fight to unmask him. But damn it, we are still drawn to Gates, his cute children and all too human failings. We’re not sure how much we want Arnott to win. Then there are the top brass: both men have bosses hell-bent on their political and personal agendas. How much have they congributed to the whole mess? There’s also a memorable performance from Neil Morrisey as Gates’ amiable best mate. He has a gammy leg and a chip on his shoulder. Just how far will his loyalty be pushed?

It’s hard in this to sort out black from white, goodies from baddies, and I guess this is Mercurio’s point. All these people believe themselves to be doing their jobs, all of them, if asked, would claim the higher ground. But all of them are working to targets and walking tight-ropes of one kind or another. Mercurio describes the show as “a revisionist commentary on 21st century policing”. So no, it’s nothing like Z Cars.

In this case the no-hero show is a good thing and makes a point of its own. But it made me realise I’m a lot less comfortable with this in my reading. Yes, there are some memorable novels that deal with the fortunes of a group. I mean, there’s  The Group  for starters  and Playing with Cotton Clouds which I reviewed recently, is a very different example of the same thing. But I’ve also struggled a couple of times recently where there are several points of view and, as far as I can see, no main contender for our affections. I’m fine with ‘two-hander’ stories where we look at a relationship between two people in detail, or in the context of history or a long-running family saga where you expect to hear from different points of view. But every now and then I’m in the middle of a contemporary novel and want to say, excuse me, whose story is this exactly?

It’s not just a question of POV (e.g. in most crime novels the detective is the hero but we still need to know what the other side is up to!) but I think beginning writers do sometimes flit around more than is necessary. But the main thing is the reader’s sympathy. If we are rooting for one person (or one relationship?), the momentum is clear, and we are a lot more likely to stay interested.

How do others feel? Do you like a ‘one-person’ story, or prefer to share the plot around?

Tall order

What makes a book stand out from the crowd? Agents tell us they are looking for ‘good stories well told’. But in an age when everyone wants to write and very many can, being good simply isn’t enough. You actually have to be brilliant.

So what constitutes brilliance exactly? In revamping a novel regarded as ‘too quiet’, Catherine Czerkawska on her Wordarts blog (itself an object lesson in how hard even established writers have to work for recognition) concludes that the key to success is a stonking great story, and I’m sure she’s right. Certainly most of the first novels I have seen lately have a premise or a storyline that’s just a bit out of the ordinary.

On another of my favourite blogs, Sarah Duncan actually gives us 10 ways to stand out. Of these my favourite is ‘pzazz’ , i.e. “phrases, metaphors, nifty dialogue, cunning transitions, description etc” which really shine out and draw the reader’s (or agent’s) attention. The really interesting thing is that Sarah aims to get five of these on every page. Yes, five on every page. Wow! No wonder her romances never feel run-of-mill.

My latest read is another excellent example of this. The setting and characters in Major Pettigrew could easily feel bland, and despite plenty of action I occasionally felt my attention waning, but if I ever thought of laying the book aside, there was always some little nugget of gold (a truly memorable simile or one of the Major’s hilarious observations) to get me interested again.

That’s it then. Stonking story and sparkling prose. For a book to ne noticed it needs to be not just polished but encrusted with diamonds. If it were a cake, it would have to be well mixed, perfectly cooked and stuffed to the hilt with cherries, nuts, and chunks of rich dark chocolate.

Plain cake is not an option.

The way you tell ‘em

Can you tell a joke? I find it’s not that easy.

You heard this particular joke a while back. It’s a good joke and  you think you remember how it goes and so off you go. ‘Listen to this one,’ you say. But half way through you realise it’s not going to work because you’ve somehow given away part of the punch-line. Or you get all the way to the end and discover the punch-line won’t work because you’ve missed some vital detail along the way. Either way there’s a fair chance that for the joke to work you’re going to have to start telling it all over again, from the beginning.

Well a novel is a tad longer than the average joke, and not necessarily comical, but in terms of the plot it works in much the same way. The information has to be revealed in just the right order and at just the right pace or it won’t work. And if when you get to the end, or even half way through, you find your joke is falling flat, it’s a very long way back to the start.

Stand-up comedy, anyone?